FAWM: "Commas and spaces"

Commas and spaces

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Liner Notes

I wrote this one as part of a challenge to write in an alternate tuning:
https://write.fawm.org/forums/2999

I chose DADF#BE. This is a very rough take but I have other things I need to do today.

#folk #acoustic #ahhh #singersongwriter #seattle

Lyrics

I have power now
But the big one's coming soon
I can't hear a word your saying
But the commas and the spaces tell me that it's you

And everything's new again
And everything's new again

I have structure now
But the earth will start shaking soon
I can't feel your footsteps approaching
But the warmth of your presence tells me that it's you

And everything's new again
And everything's new again

I have time now but the sun will change that soon
I can't face you towering above me
But when you lift me up I can see all of you

And everything's new again
And everything's new again

I have power now because the big one's coming soon
I have power now because the big one's coming soon

And everything's new again

Comments

@nigelthomas 1w

So cool. The line, “I have power now because the big one's coming soon“ is really good. I don’t understand it literally, but emotionally i completely understand.

What’re your favourite albums? I need to know the origins of these cool songs!

@cola 2w

Awesome! I'm in love with these lyrics, the lines "I can't hear a word your saying / But the commas and the spaces tell me that it's you" stand out to me especially. I can already tell I'll be back to listen to this one again later. Great work!

@skullkevin 2w

I like how this chord progression trickles down into the bottom part, where you vocals also emphasise the changing melodic parts. I find stuff like this isn't easy to make, and you've got a great piece here with potential, it would have some nice punch with some kicking drums and a walking chugging bass would be nice to go with it. It's great as a demo on it's own too, a great hitting piece and your vocals really help bring it to life too