- Syracuse US
Singer/songwriter in Syracuse, writing catchy and clever songs about things you haven't heard songs about.
In the verse you pick I'm quite attached to the the allusions to Hansel and Gretel and Ariadne's yarn. Now ask my why in a song about the emptiness of individualism/consumer society there really needs to be an allusion to those things, and I'm not going to be able to give you a straight answer! Okay, if I was pushed, I suppose it's a contrast between a slightly grim "every choice you make is right, because it's YOUR choice", which offers no path out of the morass, and actually having a route laid out before you by your moral compass, or by someone who is actively trying to help you improve yourself.
Ideally there'd be both - a more eyecatching rhyme scheme AND the meaning, which will take a bit more thought I suppose.
Iit is quite rare people are willing to offer constructive criticism on here, and I love anything you've got for me.