FAWM: "Dark Cloud"

Dark Cloud

1 week ago by @becooljanele

Dark Cloud

becooljanele

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Liner Notes

Probably gonna redo the audio at some point. My hands were not cooperating today I’m tired 🤣

#rock #folk #americana #singersongwriter #acousticonetake

Lyrics

They say “when it rains, it pours”
But I’ll be damned if I’m caught in that storm
Maybe someday they’ll learn
To bring an umbrella every where they turn

Always stepping in a puddle
Always got the wrong shoes on
People always in a scurry
To get home before the dawn
I wait up to see the sun rise
Nobody waits for me
I wasn’t the last to know
But maybe you’re the last to see

There’s a dark cloud coming
I won’t let it rain on you
Don’t you go running
And that cloud won’t follow you

You chalk it up to your luck
Say you’re “deep in the mud”
And you know it ain’t right
A single raindrop steals your fight

Always waiting for the sunshine
Hiding in the corridors
The storm is only getting closer
Thunder shakes the wooden floors
Scared to death to go outside
The lightning won’t let you be
It only follows those who let it
Just you wait and see

There’s a dark cloud coming
I won’t let it rain on you
Don’t you go running
And that cloud won’t follow you

I once had a dark cloud
held over my head
I stitched the sun to the sky
With a radiant thread

There’s a dark cloud coming
I won’t let it rain on you
Don’t you go running
And that cloud won’t follow you

Comments

@saulius 1w

This is the first of your songs I've ever listened to, so I'm probably premature in any comments. You are clearly an accomplished songwriter. This song has real potential. Your verse chord progression surprised me when I first heard it, and I love that. I'd like to hear that progression emphasized. You're already fingerpicking it, so I don't know, maybe a second guitar or other instrument can play a counterpoint to really bring out that move to the Eb7 and the to the Fm. Sorry, I'm arranging here. Then I love this chorus. I hear this sung in harmony, maybe with a call/response on the first two lines. Again, please excuse my impertinence. It was a pleasure listening to this!

@tseaver 1w

Nice write! A lyric filled with clever turns (e.g., folks scurry to get home before the dawn the narrator waits up to see) keeps grabbing the listener's ear.

"Always got the wrong shoes on" is a gem.

@rango 1w

Wow, amazing vocal control! Picking pattern is mesmerizing as well. Very good pairing of the chords and your voice. U should def publish this one it’s very good. Happy FAWM!!