FAWM: "Mirror"

Mirror

3 weeks ago by @dhiatt

Liner Notes

Palindrome weekly challenge
About the symmetry of an abusive relationship

First FAWM song ever.
Really would have liked to space things out a bit and stick a guitar solo in there, but time's short, and the demo will have to serve.
Needs a bit more grit in the vocals, but that's also something I've gotta work on...

#rock #guitar #challenge

Lyrics

There’s a fine line
between leaning on a shoulder
And shoving you down
Am I holding you up
Are you dragging me around

The more you push
The harder I pull

Are we two different sides of a mirror
Our hands touch
But our fists shatter
We pick up the pieces but it always cuts
We turn away but it doesn’t matter
Still trapped in symmetry

It’s all too easy
To turn a hug into a crush
A promise becomes a threat
Not enough becomes too much

The more I push
The harder you pull

Are we two different sides of a mirror
Our hands touch
But our fists shatter
We pick up the pieces but it always cuts
We turn away but it doesn’t matter
Still trapped in symmetry

My hooks in you, your hooks in me
Admire the symmetry?
If we tear them out we rip apart
If I break it we break together

We’re two different sides of a mirror
Our hands touch
Our fists shatter

Cause we’re two different sides of a mirror
Our hands touch
Our fists shatter
We pick up the pieces but it always cuts
Cause we’re two different sides of a mirror
Our hands touch
Our fists shatter
I’ll scatter the pieces and damn the cuts
If I can turn away you’ll turn away
If I can walk away you’ll walk away

Comments

@communitykickabout 2d

The chorus lyrics are great here - 'still trapped in symmetry' is a great hook line - really driving guitar/drum combo and catchy melody.

@ambroise 3d

I agree on the fuzzy guitar. I also dig the sound of the battery. There's an open high-hat sound that made me grin : yeah !

@sycophant 3d

That dirty fuzzy guitar is very cool. I love the “loud soft” dynamics to this song. Has a real 90s vibe - great job.

@mosno 1w

I really like the "Trapped in symmetry" line, super neat.
I'm getting some "SoundGarden" vibes from this one.
Nicely Done!

@dsimons 1w

I love the concept of two different sides of a mirror. The lyrics are really thought-invoking and you came up with the melody in a short space of time on demand? Pretty amazing. Yeah, I like your guitar work. A solo would be a terrific addition!

@emmyhush 1w

Yep I really like your interpretation of the palindrome challenge. And I love the whole metaphor that rolls out in this song - such well-crafted and evocative lyrics in a short space of time!
Also. Both my son and I thought immediately - Tenacious D -which is a compliment in this house!

@kosch 2w

Great take on the challenge - sounds wonderful - I can hear all the changes you mention working out wonderfully. Nicely crafted lyrics.
Welcome to FAWM.

@dhiatt 2w

@headfirstonly haha you got me :)

@headfirstonlyMod 2w

Nice guitar work! Those interesting inversions in the music (some very tasteful suspended 11ths—a.k.a. the "Hemispheres" chord—dropped in there by the sounds of things) very neatly mirror the multiple ones described in the text.

@greengrassgirl 2w

You write a very good lyric with fresh lines. You had me intrigued from the first line. The music seems to fit perfectly with the message. So glad you're here at FAWM.

@grayland 2w

Great composition... love the crunchy guitar and the chord prog in the chorus is so catchy!! Loved both vocals and the way they were weaved together. Lastly the lyrics are spot on and hard-felt... Great song Enjoyed it very much!! Wow!! first FAWM song!!! Whata start!!

@nadine 2w

Great song, good hookline and brilliant lyrics. I can already hear the final song, and hope that you finish that one after FAWM.

These lyrics hit so hard, when you've been involved in such a relationship or friendship. Realising that you also have a part in all this bs is the hardest thing to deal with.

@nancycunning 2w

That idea of symmetry and mirror is a really interesting way to think about an abusive relationship. The way I hear different things in each ear reinforced that idea of things happening in and outside the mirror - this distance between the two. Great work.

@dhiatt 2w

@siasa I definitely agree about trimming the chorus lyrics. I'd normally spend more time massaging the vocals and guitar lines, going back and forth until they fit a bit better, but I didn't want to take the time. But you are right on point, thanks!

@knobbyneggins815 2w

Great work for your first FAWM and first song! Welcome! If this is what you have in store, I'll be listening. Love the harmonies and the crunch! And the lyrics are great. Thought provoking and tragic. Keep it up! Glad you're here for the month!

@lcad 2w

Nice stuff! Love the chord progression on the bridge, the melody and overall vibe fit nicely and way to play with the harmony vocals to push the theme. Nice work!

@siasa 2w

This is really fine stuff. Great guitar sound, and whilst a full band version will be epic, I actually think you could make it work with just an acoustic and your vocal, which is none too shoddy by the way.

Tiny suggestion which feel free to ignore? I think you could trim the lyrics of the chorus, especially the line about the mirror - why not just 'two sides of a mirror.' Maybe even lose the 'we' in the line about picking up the pieces? But that's just me - I have a terrible habit of squeezing too many words in!

Good work. Looking forward to more.

@dhiatt 3w

@lcad music is up! Let me know what you think.

@lcad 3w

Great play on the mirror theme, literally and methaporically developed. The lyrics have a great flow and lots of imagery, looking forward to hearing them to music