FAWM: "More Space for Losing"

More Space for Losing

1 week ago by @jinx

Liner Notes

As the month progresses, I'm increasingly flying by the seat of my pants. This character came to me fully formed, like Athena springing from the head of Zeus, and I was so chilled by his story that I had to make it a song.

Wrote a verse and chorus as lyrics, came up with a tune and chords to fit them, tried singing and playing through it once. Then, while making myself a cup of tea, I came up with a few more lines. Rushed back to my desk and scribbled them down as the second half of the song... and proceeded to hit "record" on my phone voice memo app and record the whole thing before I'd ever even sung through half the song!

Didn't know if the lyrics would fit, didn't even really know what melody I wanted to sing, I just "pantsed" it all. The last few chords were an improvisation too. I'm amazed, usually my spontaneity does not turn out this well.

I visualize this being a kind of dark slow 80s industrial-rock vibe. I'm very far from being able to make any sounds remotely like that myself, but that's the dream.

#AcousticOneTake #AltRock #NotesFromTheUnderworld #Rock #AltCountry

Lyrics

My little boy is sleeping in the car
I hope he doesn’t wake up from his dream
I couldn’t stand for him to see this happening
See what Daddy’s got to do for him

If I could breathe in pure stardust
To make me stronger than this other man
Would I do it, even if it meant
I could never get back to wholly human?

Around me there’s only space
More space for losing
I see only space
More space for losing

I could stop and park and sleep a while
But the cold would come creeping in
So I stay awake, mile after mile after mile
Let him keep dreaming, as long as he can

When the night falls like a benediction
And rots the fruit of what I did today
I close my eyes and drink the draught of Lethe
Crawl into her arms and try to pray

Move along there, make space
More space for losing
Send word down the line
We’re losing
I think we’re losing

Comments

@mattmeade 1d

Your voice is so powerful - perfect for the picture you're painting here. I like how the melody in the verse stays tense but subdued - then is set free when the chorus comes. It's a voice that cannot be ignored at the moment in the song when it needs to be heard.

@sycophant 3d

lol. Very cool “pantsing”… the narrative here is haunting, and the power of your voice adds to the overwhelming sense of sorrow here. I love it! … “when the night fallls like a benediction and rots the fruit of what I did today” is such a a great line.

@motorcitymusicman 4d

The lyrics paint a powerful and sad picture here, and the performance is great. Amazing that it was so spontaneous. I really enjoyed it.

@wynia 5d

Wow, I am so impressed that this was in your “fly by the seat of your pants” category because it’s just so good! Your vocals and the lyrical pictures, wow!

@nadine 5d

These lyrics are powerful! Good you decided for asparae arrangement, really gives some room

@tamsnumber4 5d

What a wonderful write and storytelling. Love the chorus, so emotional. I was just captivated!

@williamjames 6d

Man. Powerful, dark, melancholic and some horror. Wonderfull. Massive song. Loss of words.

@handsomefalcon 6d

Haunting. Beautiful. Great, raw work.

@squirrelhavenstudios 6d

Wow. Some powerful lyrics here. And the guitar playing and singing reminded me a bit of Neil Young: the power that can come from austerity. Really cool stuff. Great work!

@jeff9 1w

Almost hypnotic in pace and with a dreamlike quality to the narrative. It's quite artfully written and the tragedy of it just rips your heart out. A real powerhouse lyric.

@lamerabbit 1w

Powerful and beautiful. As it is. It might be interesting to hear it as electric too but really works like this. Maybe stronger like this.

@lcad 1w

Beautiful lyric and great melody. Love the 2nd last verse. This was a great spontaneous write. I find good songs often come in a burst like this. Great work!

@heather 1w

Wow!! Amazing imagery and storytelling (well, you start in the middle of the story - we can only guess at the beginning and the end…) Haunting and quite chilling as well. Impressive pantsing!